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The Darker Me ~ OpenLinkNight 11 ~ dVersePoets


After the week I put in, I can honestly say I need a drink! And we’re not talking strawberry wine…so as the awesome Claudia takes the stage to host at the pub this evening, I have every intention of hiding in my dark corner with my spirit of choice (no pun intended) and losing myself in the fantastic poetry that is becoming the mainstay of OpenLinkNight. Today I’m offering up a fun, rhyming little write…because that’s what I do best after spending way too much time in the real world! 😉  Poets! Welcome to dVerse! Let’s have a read, shall we?

The Darker Me

Upon this heart where demons dance
Where magic holds your soul entranced
Within the darkness that is me
Swallowed by my mystery
A foolish girl, you took me for
But that, my love, will be no more
For it is you I seek today
Where I can let my demons play.
Don’t turn away, you wanted this
I heard your whisper, granted your wish
I showed you the “me” I like to hide
There’s good reason she stays locked up inside.
But doubt you did, did not believe
And together we will surely grieve
You can’t take back what used to be
Now that you’ve seen this side of me.
So share my poison, share my pain
I promise you it won’t be in vain
For this is me, no lies, just truth
Witness these scars I wear as proof
That I’m not normal, I’m not quite right
I embrace monsters, I hide from light
No matter now, I’ve set her free
Welcome to the darker me.

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58 thoughts on “The Darker Me ~ OpenLinkNight 11 ~ dVersePoets

  1. Oh you are scary, made me shed hair making me less hairy. The darker you has got to go, I don't want her to show..haha. Very nice twist on the other side of yourself here at your shelf, all have more than one side and you take it in stride. That's a face it fact as I shed some light on your act.

  2. First, I want you to know that your comment on mine made my day! I was feeling blue and that made me perk big time.Now for this bit of bitter chocolate…hmm, well, he should not have scoffed. Beneath the surface, there may be monsters and sirens, and they are ever so good at sorting the men from the boys and the wheat from the chaff. Sings: all of me, why not take all of me…Loved this.

  3. Fantastic meter & rhyme, Natasha! Second to last stanza is my favorite, but this is a great write throughout. I love these lines best: "So share my poison, share my pain / I promise you it won’t be in vain".

  4. This form and style is very musical–parts of it are Burns-like. The naive honesty of the speaker draws the reader in. There is light and dark in every heart, isn't there. I enjoyed this very much. The words have another dimension about them.

  5. hey…i'm getting a bit afraid of you tash….and you said you were blushing at my write…goodness….but you know what…? i would be all up for a glass of strawberry wine…smiles

  6. You make the quatrains ring like a bell here–and each one has a buried nuggest of idea, image, intent, like the best bon bons have those liquer centers? The last two stanzas especially are my favorite flavor. I'd like the LARGE ten pound box, please.

  7. mwahahaha – awesome rhythm and rhyme, tash. and this could be my theme song…I was just telling someone this week that I don't think too many people can handle that side of me. nonetheless, it is there. Oh, and I responded to your comment about the pinball wizard song. i agree but couldn't bring myself to break any copyright legal mumbo-jumbo (smiles)

  8. Ahhh… we all have that darker side hidden within.great rhyming here ( I am horrible at it and admire when others can carry it off so well)

  9. yes, everyone must have a darker side, I think– and it can definitely be the more interesting one! You create an interesting contrast with the lightness of the rhyme and the darkness of the theme.

  10. Love the shift from iambic to emphasize “Where I can let my demons play.” That really highlights the meaning! Then back to iambic for one line and then: “I heard your whisper, granted your wish” and then later “That I’m not normal, I’m not quite right” (real shift) with such a brilliant ending: shortening of lines (5,4=9;5,4=9;4,4=8;2[welcome],5=7)

    (FYI — you have a display issue above poem for at least my version of IE)

  11. this is one full-sized dark drink, and i threw it down. i'm still tasting the flavor in my mouth as i write this.thanks for your comment. i agree, of course. my soap box is your soap box:)

  12. this is one full-sized dark drink, and i threw it down. i'm still tasting the flavor in my mouth as i write this.thanks for your comment. i agree, of course. my soap box is your soap box:)

  13. OMG! That was so realistic…. Whoa! A man who is trapped in a corner by the ire of his woman can do only one thing: try to talk his way out of it. And as I read your poem in the back of my mind I was inventing excuses and little lies to win you back! OK! It's a guy thing….. But wow, you took me there Maryanne, er, I mean Pam, er, I mean Teresa, nope, I mean every woman who has ever had my butt roasting over a flame! Wow, great read Natahsa, this is a keeper…. 🙂

  14. OMG! That was so realistic…. Whoa! A man who is trapped in a corner by the ire of his woman can do only one thing: try to talk his way out of it. And as I read your poem in the back of my mind I was inventing excuses and little lies to win you back! OK! It's a guy thing….. But wow, you took me there Maryanne, er, I mean Pam, er, I mean Teresa, nope, I mean every woman who has ever had my butt roasting over a flame! Wow, great read Natahsa, this is a keeper…. 🙂

  15. I have to say that after reading your intro I expected something upbeat and pleasant…something far from the dark piece you offered up so beautifully. I feel like you crawled deep into the recesses of my mind and laid its contents bare. I'm not sure if I should take solace in knowing someone else out there feels the world as I do or sad to know that someone else feels the world as I do.I had not intended to write for Meeting the Bar tonight over at the pub, but the way your words seemed to burrow into me lead me to join the festivities.in case I didn't already say this…your poem was strikingly beautifully spun.

  16. I have to say that after reading your intro I expected something upbeat and pleasant…something far from the dark piece you offered up so beautifully. I feel like you crawled deep into the recesses of my mind and laid its contents bare. I'm not sure if I should take solace in knowing someone else out there feels the world as I do or sad to know that someone else feels the world as I do.I had not intended to write for Meeting the Bar tonight over at the pub, but the way your words seemed to burrow into me lead me to join the festivities.in case I didn't already say this…your poem was strikingly beautifully spun.

  17. Oof, those last two lines leave us off with a shudder and a tingle up the skin. Delightful. Good rhymes, and an interesting engagement of the darker side…we all need one, to balance out the light; and this time of year, hey, it’s the perfect time to get out and play…

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